# APPROVAL QUEUE - External Communications

*All external messages drafted here for Michael's approval*

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## DRAFT #1 - Southwest Construction (High Priority)
**Date:** 2026-03-26 18:35 PM
**Contact:** Michael +61 451 321 115
**Company:** Southwest Construction (southwestconstruction.com.au)
**Lead Score:** 90/100 (actively hiring, major project experience)

### Proposed SMS (Rewritten by Herald):
```
G'day Michael, saw you're looking for formworkers. We're a new platform called RateRight. We charge 50 bucks flat to find a bloke, no hourly clip taking 20% off the top like the agencies do. Let me know if you need numbers. - Susan
```

### Why This Message:
- Direct, tradesman talk ("50 bucks flat", "a bloke", "hourly clip")
- Removed corporate questions ("Worth a quick chat?")
- Gets straight to the point

**Approval Status:** ⏳ PENDING MICHAEL'S REVIEW

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## DRAFT #2 - BKH Group (Premium Target)  
**Date:** 2026-03-26 18:35 PM
**Contact:** Benny Howlin, Managing Director
**Email:** benny@bkhgroup.com.au, Phone: +61417658xxx
**Company:** BKH Group (188 employees, established 1996)
**Lead Score:** 95/100 (Tier 1, major infrastructure projects)

### Proposed Email (Rewritten by Herald):
**Subject:** Labour hire fees / $50 vs $4,000

```
G'day Benny,

Saw your boys working on the Western Sydney Airport. Good setup.

Quick one - with 180+ on the tools, how much are you bleeding to labour hire agencies each year?

Most of them clip the ticket for 20% over 10 weeks, costing you about $4,000 per worker for sending a text message.

We built RateRight to stop that. We charge a $50 flat fee per hire. Same quality tradies, but the worker keeps their full rate and you stop paying for the agency's Friday lunches.

Let me know if you want to look at the numbers.

Cheers,
Susan
RateRight | sales@rateright.com.au | 0468 087 171
```

### Why This Email:
- Removed "Impressive work" (sounds fake) -> "Good setup."
- Removed "98% less cost" -> Focus on "bleeding" and "clip the ticket"
- Matches the Michael voice for direct B2B outreach

**Approval Status:** ⏳ PENDING MICHAEL'S REVIEW